Hi everybody what do you think about my poem?
Because of you, my illusions of love have faded.
Because of you, our memories are killing me.
Not anyone will i love again, i believe.
Because of you, i cant picture happiness anymore.
Because of you all i see is hatred towards guys.
Because of you, my illusions of love have faded.
Because of you my parents cant trust me anymore.
Because of you my heart will for ever be broken, i believe.
Because of you i don't feel happy like before.
Because of you i committed mistakes that i regret.
Because love for me means and feels nothing, nothing.
Because of you, my illusions of love have faded.
I understand god makes things happen for a reason.
I say, why would he want to see me hurt?
Because of you, my fear is to love again.
I try to forget, to move on but because of you it hurts and its hard.
Because of you, because of you, all because of you.
Because of you, my illusions of love have faded.
It's a little repetitive, and I completely understand what you are going for when it comes to the is poem, you want the repetition to drive in your message. But, there is a point where repetition should be halted, you've gotten a little out of hand with it, and I advise that you revise it. You could possibly have it repeat every three lines instead of, well, nearly every line.
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